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heartbreaking moons and epic sunsets

Journal Entry: Wed Feb 8, 2012, 11:34 AM


The captain would not listen when the crew politely questioned -
he said he had to hold his course and finally shipwrecked us.

With twenty thousand miles to go to reach our destination,
we sent a message on ahead that said, "Best not to expect us."

Some studied what had happened as if details were salvation -
they only found we had not known how little did protect us.

We tried to take the captain down and relieve him of his station -
and still he stayed the captain, somehow able to deflect us.

The poets and the priests conferred and offered consolation.
"We'll do all that we can," they said, "as long as you respect us."

They say that trouble has a way to bring people together -
if that is true in fact, would someone please connect us?

At least heartbreaking moons are giving nights of peaceful resting -
we lie awake and gaze at them till dreams come to collect us.

Some days we are discouraged, but then we go to breakfast -
the epic sunsets and strong coffee begin to resurrect us.


Image: :iconpiarvi-recherreen: and :icongreyguardian:

Words: :iconpiarvi-recherreen: ("heartbreaking moons and epic sunsets for breakfast")

Words: :iconrichardleach: (all the rest)

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  • Listening to: John Coltrane
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:iconmarkus43:
still he stayed the captain, somehow able to deflect us

how does that work?

it has always elided me
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*RichardLeach Feb 16, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
yeah. and there are so many more of us than there are of the captain and his lieutenants. but there he stays.
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:iconhummbuzz:
Excellent vision...from beginning to the very end. :nod:
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Mood: Affection *RichardLeach Feb 12, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
Thank you so much, Yvette!
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~Izaaaaa Feb 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
nice! especially like the ending "Some days we are discouraged, but then we go to breakfast -
the epic sunsets and strong coffee begin to resurrect us."
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*RichardLeach Feb 8, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
thanks, Isabelle! i thought that made a nice ending too :aww:

:whisper: p-h was slightly disappointed monday that i borrowed a poem rather than writing one - so i wrote him one of his own :D
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:iconpiarvi-recherreen:
yeahhh and i love what you wrote :dance:

it's not just a poem, it's also a beautiful allegory ...

and i guess that was totally the idea of the title of my collab with *Greyguardian, poetry will give us comfort and maybe salvation too :nod:
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*RichardLeach Feb 8, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
thanks, so glad you like it :aww:

i had fun with it but it said serious things too :nod:

and it's often quoted but, to quote William Carlos Williams, "It is difficult/to get the news from poems/yet men die miserably every day/for lack/of what is found there."
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:iconpiarvi-recherreen:
i didn't know this quote, very interesting :nod:
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*RichardLeach Feb 9, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
oh i'm glad to show it to you :aww:

Williams is not one of my favorite poets but every english language poet must know and salute those words :salute:
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